So, song is not bad overall. But personally I don't like this style. It's kind of a mix of village's songs (polkas for ex.) and metal.
Some mistakes were found but as you not native speaker: who cares? (If you want:
1. Sometimes gender changes in song (if I don't get sense right it's not fault):
"Пока в погоне за ветром, он СБИЛ меня прямо с ног" - words of a man;
"Ты хотела меня ну, унижать - получилось, но я по крайне живА", "вот моя новая рана - не что стою я одна" - women's words.
If I not mistaken the main hero is a man. So sometimes its sounds weird.
2. I think it's no use to put slang words like: "щас", "сассный", "насрать"; better will be normal equivalents: "сейчас", "красивый (idk)".
Yup.)